I am sorry i cannot rate this high.

The animation was sub par with what you were able to do.
The plot was almost non-existant.
Things seemed to reliant upon the text that you were using.
The last thing i find this needed is a much better color quality and more importantly, it needed an improved art. this would be alright if it had been a first animation.
finally, find a program that you draw with outside of flash, as it is visable that things were drawn within flash.

Other than that, the only thing i really find that is good with this other than the intro is that the animation was smooth.

a valiant attempt

but a pilot should show a little more, this was a pitch, the idea, not full realized in an episode. Also, you can't cover up a lack of voice acting with a song. I suggest you get a mic or look into the voice acting section of this site.

Also, and this is a personal thing. The whole "video games= ma life" shtick is very played out. You're going to need to bring a little more to the table if you want to stand out and grow.

good luck

...Oo

nice try but...no offence , IT SUX!!!