Needs more
A shame that there isn't more to a potentially powerfully evocative piece here. The lines need to be thinner when it comes to ageing the film, which would look absolutely great if you did this - it's too clumsy at the moment.
With the almighty lack of plot, you've made a rod for your own back, so please give it some story to work with, as opposed to a looping conversation.
I know that this can be made a lot better, even if you're not gunning for the whole piece to be an award winning expose of the way that black people were excluded from things at the turn of the 20th century. No-one's forcing you to go that way, but it wouldn't hurt to make a more balanced piece.
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