Here's a few things I found wrong with it.
It is a good flash but it could be so much better!

The speech bubbles... I know you are looking for voice actors (which isn't bad) but for now, I'd rather have a button you can click whenever I am done reading the bubbles.
At times, the text goes by too fast, and I can't read the entire thing.

The screen is too small. Flash is a "lined" program rather than a pixel program, so you can set the screen size anything you want without it getting fuzzy. It also makes it harder to read the text.

I don't mind the detailed backgrounds, but you don't need too much detail when it comes to backgrounds, or at least that's what I think because no one is going to notice.

The movement in the characters we ok, but it wasn't animated too well :p

Last thing I noticed, the sound wasn't set on stream! That's buggy XP

because most people won't bother to finish it. you said that having the talk bubbles makes the view pay attention... i think its the opposite. when some of the text goes by too fast to read and/or you can't read it at all, its not captivating and the people won't want to read more and they won't know the story... however good it really is.

i think your attempt at making it movie like was only in vain. the focus changes weren't very successful in the sense that the radial fill doesn't blur well. the screen was too small (which goes with not being able to read the text). all the detail that you spent in the backgrounds was useless if you couldn't see it and the people and there movements were sad excuses for animation and epecially with as much time as you claim you spent on it. i would suggest spending some time on good quality characters (not floating hands, feet, and a circle with dots for a face) and just make it a click for the next page comic thing with music that will loop for different pages.
speaking of sound. you put the sound on the wrong mode! its supposed to be on stream so that when you pause it will stop the music as well as animation. right when that messed up the whole thing, i just gave up watching, it wasn't worth it.

2/5 regardless of how long it is or how good of a story it is, its not that great.
i hope i got to everything i was thinking of.

crepth

but it can be improved if you had some way or fast forwarding and rewinding cuz it really sucks if the video was interrupted int he middle and you have to watch it all over again.

Was that counterstrike sounds I heard?

Whilst having a strong and very well written story, and fairly good animation, your artwork was substandard. It wasn't bad enough to entirely kill the movie, but it did decrease the atmosphere somewhat, you could easily keep the same style of character, just add more detail, and some proper flesh tones would be nice for their faces. The lack of voice acting wasn't too much of a problem, but i'd recomend subtitles at the bottom of the screen, possbly with a small picture of the characters face next to it, so people wouldn't get confused as to who's speaking; this, combined with better graphics would give you a definite winner of a movie.

It was really pretty deep stuff. The animation was pretty good, and the music really created the right atmosphere. The only problems are that while the speech bubbles served decently, I really wish you would reconsider voice actors in the future, and it needs a replay button.