Score: 7
"An improvement from the first."
date: January 27, 2008
I liked this episode more than the first, although, there was still alot more that could of been done but this flash is better and for in the amount of time it took you to make this after the first one, you mustn't of had alot of time but don't force yourself to work fast in flash.
I felt like when you used the introduction text and the text telling us where everything is and whatnot, I really felt like it should of faded in and out. The animation needed a bit more work here and there. When the beast walks towards the forest, try using more than just two frames on him walking. Please work on your graphics a bit more, too. Don't get me wrong, most of the flash was lovely to look at but the forest could of used a bit more work on it and maybe the computer monitors could of done with some static.
Good use of filter effects, this time: they weren't overused. Good choice in music, too. It really helps to set the scene. I was disappointed how you made the series seem serious with the first episode but now it seems like you're trying to keep it comical. If you started it off as serious, you should really keep it going as a serious series.
I was disappointed also by the fact that there wasn't voice acting and text just doesn't cut it. It feels less entertaining if you must read throughout all of the flash unless if there is a button allowing you to skip to the next frame which allows you to see what the next character says - kind of like a comic book. People love flashes like those! Heck, so do I! :P
The plans were a bit silly, to be honest. You should of thought about what they would be before you made this, really. The main character is 'The Beast', correct? Well, my thought on what he'd be thinking when I saw that bit was 'I FOUND A PLAN OF MYSELF, OH NO!!! O:'. It's too late to go back and change that but in the next episode, you should really make it seem quite significant to the series. Will he manage to duplicate himself by using these plans? Will it tell us the origin of his creator? Will it tell us if he is a normal human being but gone wild due to an infection? An implant of some sort? Feel free to use those ideas if they help.
Anyways, good job on this flash. It was pretty cool but there was quite alot of work needed, still. I can't wait to see the next episode! :) 7/10.
January 27, 2008
Author's Response:
Ok, so much to think about there.
I'm going to match my responses to your paragraphs.
The time I took to make this Flash probably totals about 36 hours (1.5 days). I do tend to rush a bit. I'll try and take it slower next time.
When the beast runs towards the forest, there is actually 4 frames, but because you're looking at him from behind, you can only CLEARLY see 2. And yes, I had lots of trouble on the forest, as you picked. As for static on the monitors, how would I do this?
Yes, I turned down the use of filter effects this time. About the 'comical' effect. I wasn't really going for that. Apart from the 'Donuts' thing.
I had a voice actor to start with, but he just wasn't that good. That's why I cut most of the dialogue that was meant to be in this movie.
The Plans...ah, yes. Ok, theres a simple answer to the crapiness of those.
PAGES.
What you saw is only the cover and BASIC measurements. There is much more in-depth information inside.
Your ideas were really helpful. I can almost guarantee that at least one will make it into future episodes.
Thanks for the review, they help TONNES!
