maybe u should strengthen the message
It was very hard to see the message. and a key element of any short presentation is to bring the message on quickly & openly. you have only a few seconds to portray what you're trying to say. and each second is another 5-25 frames that you have to create to keep your message going. all in all though you brought a good effect with a great drawing style. and use of colour wasn't needed to create emotion. you did it with raw talent. well done.