Score: 9

"Coolies"

by: Skaijo

date: January 16, 2007

I'm really shocked that you only used Windows Media stock sound files to pull this off. I never would have guessed--and it fits the animation so well.

++Very nice quality--I love the colorful world. Nice attention to detail, especially with the smoke coming out of the carts at the airport.

-When the car screeched to a hault, the streak lines stopped before the car did, which shouldn't have happened.

-The beginning Ibby's Hair Restorer title shot had far too high of a contrast between the red text and the blue bg.

++I love the facial expressions of Ibby's lips. How did you do that? I'm guessing you fbf'd that. I'm not sure, but it's a fantastic effect that you pulled off. I've never see something like that before.

+Nice factory shots and inside jokes with the labels. They were on screen for just the amount of time needed to get the joke, which was expertly done.

I really liked the simple story but it would have been nice if there was more conflict as a whole. Still, it was a wonderfully made flash animation.

Score: 6

"cool one"

by: KWAS71KCK

date: December 10, 2006

that was a cool and amusing animation. nice audio in this one, the character was pretty cool, very amusing idea and outcome to this one, good entertainment and your efforts were nice. i think that the drawings/graphics in this one were a little bit sloppy and could've been better in this one. if you're having troubles... there are many tutorials that will be able to help you out.
overall, it was a cool animation.

Score: 4

"end, I jus"

by: Bezman

date: November 4, 2006

+++ The resourceful use of MS sounds was amusing.

-- It was a bit aurally empty though. Some bgm could work well mebbe.

+ The 2 jokes when he was working on the formula raised a smile.

+ The author names (hugh Mann particularly) raised a smile.

---- Most of the story is boring and predictable. There's no obstacles, he just chooses what to do and then he gets it. There's no revelations or interesting stuff that we see after his first success.
Maybe you could have used that to show some funny effects of folk having all this hair... old men being able to woo the grannies... maybe some bald kids with chemotherapy or whatever are able to strut with their new Elvis-style dos?
Or maybe you should've had some actual problem/obstacles arise with the production? Maybe some crazy guy doesn't want him to make the formula? Maybe the failed formulas are making him less and less human, emaciating him and draining his life?

--- The start is too sudden - we're given no explanation as to who he is, and the revelation that he's a baldy comes out of no-where. Maybe the start could have been him walking along a street and people smirking at his baldiness. Maybe he has a dream where he's a guy with loads of hair and then he wakes up, inspired to find a formula when he sees he's still just a baldy? That's just off the top of my head, but basically, something establishing who he is, maybe giving a chance for some personality to come across, would be nice.

-- Art is too basic and not clean either.

+ I do like the 'D' at the start.

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It kinda made me smile at points, and kept me vaguely entertained, but at the end, I just thought, 'is that it?' I was expecting more really.

I skimmed a few of your previous responses and also saw the stuff when you click the paper and note that there's gonna be some crazy problems with too much hair. That sounds good.

Score: 6

"Great idea"

by: Muskelchock

date: September 23, 2006

It was a good idea. Some good jokes. but you could get in more jokes.

I am sorry about making you wait for hammerthrow 7.

/ MC

Score: 7

"Cool"

by: NHT123

date: September 8, 2006

I think it would be alot better if you woked on your drawing skills. Now I know it's in flash, but there are simple solutions to incoporate quality drawings. Firstly, you must first make a sketch. Secondly you must scan in this sketch, and couler the sketch. Thirdly you must import it to flash. This is the hardest part, so read carfully. Make sure your image is saved in either a bitmap or J-peg format. Import things like you normally would, then click on it; goto the modifier menu and click trace bitmap. Set the settings, you may have to play around with it somewhat. And erase the uncoulered part of your drawings. This is the best way to aquire quality graphics on your flash. You may want to practice drawing more, but you definatly have potential. I'm assuming you drew this on flash, so i'm interested on what you could do out of flash. Theres many books out there on drawing, so get to it. Your concept was a great idea, but the lack of voices made it impersonal and bleak. The over use of sound effects lowered the quality of your flash, if used a little less it would make all the difference. Great idea, great concept just rework it and you'll have a front pager for sure;)