Score: 8
"I loved it!!!"
date: February 24, 2006
However I noticed a few things that happened, maybe just on my end.
I counted off for the background dissappearing. The background that was there wasn't interesting enough. Hopefully there will be more scenes in the next one.
OK, now sound is 0, and it may be my fault, but it the voices didn't match up with the mouth movements due to timing (The mouth moved right, but the sound spontaneously was too early from time to time). Like I said, it may be my fault, but I hope you look into it, because it felt like an old japanese film.
Anyway, I like the humor, although it could use just a little more umph (it seems as if you're just on the edge of a nonstop comedy), but there were a few seconds of downtime where you should have kept cracking a few more jokes.
The use of pauses was a little overdone. Either shorten the pause times, or take one out... I think the second or third pause was unnecessary, however, you almost have that mastered as well.
And most importantly, good luck on your next one, because you're really showing some promise.
Author's Response:
yeah, the backround was actually due to procrastination, hence the title. the sound is my computers poor exporting fault. many problems arise in my flash 8, such as opening actions slows the computer down to a crawl, text does not appear correctly (not due to dynamic text) stream does not work, nor does it work in a movieclip (if I do that the movie skips when it tries to play) and the list goes on. and thanks
