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something inspired by you viewers.. please give me feedback on how to improve.. thanks.
((( INTERESTING )))
This was entertaining, and interesting, kinda drags on though an dthen gets confusing, you should make the cenes abit smaller if you can, but it was ok i like dit, so notbad, hope to see more soon...
~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Shorter scenes would be a start...
Entertaining but could be smoother...
Not very good. The animation appeared to be a poorly-done attempt to emulate the animation of Double Helix and the Super Flash Bros. Not that that's bad, but it was a poor emulation.
The intro was too long. Don't complain about past crap submissions. Improve on them. I didn't see the old one, but if this is an improvement, it must be really bad.
Although it was an original idea, having the movie be set inside of the Flash window was bad. The only time a movie should have screenshots of flash as the background is in a tutorial. This was not a tutorial. Try harder next time, but don't submit another crappy one.
That was so bad it made me want to pee myself.
Prioritize for your audience. The entire explanation of why this idea or character or whatever was resubmitted could have either been jotted down in the "author's comments," condensed to about two words (such as "I'm sorry") or omitted entirely.
Use your characters better. The thing you had the character doing? With his clone and the gun? No. It's been done before, and it's been done better. It usually involves a plot. Alternately: Do it, but have it done within the space of 5 seconds. You could have used the other time you frittered away to introduce a plot. Theoretically, /you/ could have.
A flash editor is not a good setting for a flash movie. There are very few exceptions to this rule. Your movie was not one of them. Put your guys in a gravy tureen that is sailing along the entrails of murdered kittens. Have them quarrel on the landscape of Jenna Jameson's ass. Whatever you like. Have fun with it. Just have fun with it somewhere other than a flash editor.
The final product you submitted is fine for showing to friends and "just for fun" for yourself, but an audience as *cough* refined as the New Grounds folks are going to want to see more than you crudely stroking yourself to climax with a cheesegrater.
You still suck
just wrote a long review and lost it.
Contention was - You suck.
So learn from this site...
www . keyframer . com
good character animation tutorials
and character building.
It's spelt "You're"
You're = you are. You also spelt "too" wrong. You also repetitively capitalized words that didn't need to be, and you weren't even consistant with it. You just seemed to arbitrarily capitalize words... ugh, this whole flash was frustrating to watch. Spend some time on your charcaters and make them look good, learn to use varying line weights and make your works look good together. The black fellow's eyes could also be greaty improved if you took half a second to look at how real eyes are structered. I realize it's a cartono figure, but in cartoons eyes do not look like that but in the shittiest of them. Yuo could have at least used circle, ovals just look worse!
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