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This is the first animated adventure of a wizard called "Nuok." He first appeared in some short stories I'd written in college.
You NEED new voices
The voice acting in this movie was horrible, it made it really difficult to enjoy the rest of the movie, which was quite nice.
Hmmm... I feel your pain, but... A lot of people hated my voice. I think I'm going to do the voice for the next one. I'll just try to make it more realistic. And clear... And not as monotone...
Voices need work...
The voice acting was poor... it was like the script was being read. The voices were kind of monotone. It has to flow more naturally for this to really work. Actually, it seemed that the movie was read from the stories you wrote, and not from a script adapted from your stories. There is a big difference between something written that is to be read and something written that is too be animated/acted.
But your stories seem interesting.
If you can add some facial expressions to your characters that would add a lot of "visual" emotion to the voices.
Great start though. I'm looking forward to see more chapters!
Well I didn't really animate a short story... I took the characters and wrote a new story, but I wrote it in a similar style as I would write a short story, because I figured that having a voiceover would allow me to explain things the might not be able to be figured out simply by showing it to you...
Yeah, I'll try to work on my acting. I was actually thinking about doing more with facial expressions, but I don't know what happened... I guess I was rushing...
The animation itself was good. Some really nice effects in there. The dialogue was pretty bad, as was the voice acting.but overall not bad. I gave you a 4 out of the 5.
Bad in terms of acting? Or bad in terms of writing? Or both?
very well drawn, the style was good, sound was pretty good, 3 for interactivity because of the play button at the start. 0 for humor though, the last part makes me want to see a sequal. 8 overall for a great job. keep these coming.
The play button at the start?
I know the "replay" button doesn't work, but I thought the play button worked fine. Did you not like the glow of it? Me not understand...
That was really well put together. The animation was slick, the music GREAT and the voice acting pretty good too. One thing I'd say about the voices is put a bit more emotion in - it got a touch monotonous after a while, specially the main guy. He's telling a ripping yarn, MAKE it ripping! Not that it was bad, it just needed a bit more excitement, you know?
Anyway, that's my eight pence. Hurry up with part two :)
By emotion, do you mean enthusiasm?
I guess if weird stuff happens to you, you aren't going to be matter of fact about it. I'll keep it in mind.
A look at the first day of Lucina in Super Smash
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