The pictures look nice, but this "game" has an A-rating.

You should change it to M, because A's for uncensored adult material.

The art is very well done, and this has pretty good potential as an adult comic. A couple of typographical and grammatical errors here and there take away from the value a little bit, however. Overall, it needs neatening up, and perhaps an easier method of movement from page to page and so on, and it'd do great.

turn the age to 'A' and remove the censorchip XD.
(sorry my bad english)

I wasn't expecting a manga type of thing. I mainly skipped through the whole thing but some of the content was a bit disturbing (thankfully you censored it). Other than that I'm sure it was fine. Overall I would rate this 1/5.

This is not a game.