not bad

but most of it seems based off eddsworld's jokes. as does a big part of your plot. i see u wanna do this as homage to edd but try to be a bit more original. ur definetly trying i could see that. i'll tell you this. the fact u somehow got in the army and the edd you land on should be the only things that remind you of edd's army episode. because if you have too much of the same things as edd it kinda starts to look like you are copying him. overall pretty good tough. u'll get your own style over time