Okay, several things...

First off, you SERIOUSLY need to use better grammar. I could overlook it if this was a pure game, meaning story wouldn't matter as much, but in a story driven flash like this, it's a pretty big deal. Start spacing and using periods where they belong instead of commas. It takes not even 10 minutes to do and doesn't rape the viewer's eyes. On top of that, dialouge can be kind of out of place. Something tells me in the age of FE, they wouldn't be saying slang like "gotta"

Second, you REALLY need to be more original with names. All you do is either distort names from FE/History and it's painfully obvious "Adolfo Zitler? Marf, as in Marth from SSB OMG LAWL?" So yeah, work on creativity, too.

Gameplay, meh, can't offer anything, maybe a limit break system?

...Sound, fix that, seriously. The recruitment theme for battle? Um, what were you thinking? Try to pick something RESEMBLING battle music. And the Smash Brothers sound effects at the end of a battle are VASTLY out of place, take that out. Victory fanfares, the level up jingle from FE, I don't care, just lose the cheering. Seriously. That has to go.

Overall, plot is pretty good, but, like I said, suffers since the text is so annoying to read.

There's some potential here, and I'll admit I was expecting a LOT worse, but it needs a ton of polish.

Enjoyalbe

I'm a sucker for a good storyline. Only things I didn't like were in the second battle, I defeated the enemy on the third turn. It actually would have been the second turn but I got him down to -180 health and I had to attack him again before it ended. I attacked with the knight and after he hit the bandit, I clicked on Ericka and it went through the talking sequence. It wouldn't continue that turn and the bandit didn't get a chance to attack me. I liked it though. Better make another one soon. :)

good only..

i give it a 7 becaus its good the only thing is:
1) It would be nice to have a skip intro button.
2)If your mana isn't high enough to do a magic
attack you skip a turn instead of just teling
te player that he/she does't have the mana.

Hmmm...

Well, this particular game wasn't exactly the best... But since you're new to creating RPG's I'll go easy on ya. You are very good at making up interesting storylines, even though you lack a bit skill in gameplay. You should improve the battle system, perhaps add reactioncommands (e.g.e. pressing the right key in battle decreases/increases damage). And, as the loyal mage I am in most games, I would like to be able learning magic. Still, you are great for being a beginner, so keep trying, and do your best!

Oh, and watch out for the ninjas. /RashDecision

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Doesnt get past the Fire Emblem Logo and im not using a old PC...