good stuff.
very good beginnings of your oldest of stories my friend. I couldn't justify giving you 10s across the board though because as awesome as all of it was, and with as high as its potential is, it's really only a teaser - if you want, might I suggest amping up your reading pages to go more with the fact that there's an obvious design through your whole concept? I dunno, fade-in text, have it read in the voice you want with a level balance against the music... you're obviously very creative. thanks for sharing a small taste of the story.