needs something more
great style. props to that. good idea in general, but very lacking in the humour dept. however, your potential is rich. if you threw in more random shit and develop on sitcom parody, youll have some bombin ass material. the biggest mistake is the little suicide guy scene; too much time filler. you should've thrown in his roomate having a cannibal party on his post-mortem pal, or something derranged like that.