At 6/25/07 02:46 PM, Otreely wrote: I think it's pretty good so far. Would it be too muvh trouble for me to appear in this story?
No it wouldn't, your in. :)
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Eyes From Hell [a Bbs Story]
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I'm a zombie?!?...COOL!
or wait, I got shot in the head right after I appeared, I'm I like dead dead now?
You Are Free To Sever The Chains That Bind You.
could you throw me in there i'd like that thx it's good don't stop writing though!
At 6/24/07 06:43 PM, Senri wrote:At 6/24/07 08:09 AM, iateamexican wrote: Nice story.No more people will be in later. I gurantee all that ask to be in will be in it. Maybe not for a few parts, but they will be in it.
I allways have like zombies and that stuff.
Is it to late to get in?
Or was the "more than 4 people" thing a bit of a hint?
Cool, thanks.
At 6/26/07 06:14 PM, deafeningsilence5 wrote: Them damn zoombinies, always biting the fuck out of people.
Hey! Now that I'm a zombie I take offense to that!
You Are Free To Sever The Chains That Bind You.
All right everyone that has asked for a spot is in. I'll get out part 4 and 5 this week. Probably tomarrow.
Sorry for slacking off so much.
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may i be in it plz.
dont make me a pussy okay?
aren't story threads not allowed anymore?
Hello my good sir! I would like to be the Super Zombie that kills everyone! You do know all zombie storys have to have a Super Zombie!
When I die. It will be in a blaze of glory.
At 9/1/07 02:36 AM, Blackdoom13 wrote: Hello my good sir! I would like to be the Super Zombie that kills everyone! You do know all zombie storys have to have a Super Zombie!
yeah like Resident evil (or dawn of the dead, i get em mixxed up >.> ) had Nemesis! Well we wasnt a zombie but still.... I would also like to be in it my good sir. I dunno how you put me in there, but if i get bitten, have my charater commit suicide. It would be for the greater good. but to make this post semi meaningfull, i will review like that other guy did :D
Storyline:
Not too bad, try not to rush it. Add more detail, like when that 'The zombie fell from a the second story' be like 'Just then, out of nowhere. someone fell out the window of the second story, a police officer went to investigate. Then the man rose up with red eyes and attacked the cop' yeah stuff like that but good overall. Remember: be creative :D
Grammer:
Err... not much here. but from the 'Storyline' part, use more depth. Thats about it
Reality:
This is where most people can just sometimes cross the line. Like how they were 'convintely' prepared for a zombie invasion, try to be more they were mentally preped and knew what they had to do and what to get. Also pay attention to their needs, just because its an a zombie apoc, doesnt't mean that don't have to take a piss.
Voilence (YAY):
Everything is a weapon! Make sure they the charaters use thier surroundings to make full advanatge of it! If these people were ready for a a zombie apoc, then better know this too. and when they use melee weapons (like machettes) make sure they go spartan style! Unless they wanna get owned.
Charater Names:
when using names such as Toastman7007, first cut the number(s) if any so Toastman and remove stuff that has more than one noun, Toastman=Toast, now mess around with it to come up with names like Toas,Tom,Tommy etc.. so the names are more realistic which plays an important part
Bad Luck:
bad stuff happens, make sure just not all good stuff happen to them like
1. Main charater(s) die
2.lose of supplies
3.Out of ammo
4.Get lost (that would really suck)
5.Argue within teammates (this one is an iffy)
This would really be good if put in right but really bad if left out. Good stuff cna happen too
Well that was alot to type...... good story btw and nice how you add us into it :D good luck with it
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can you include me as a good zombie one who swears alot and has healing factor and ges his limbs chopped off on the first encounter?
Are you guys talking about a game and can i be in it?
At 9/24/07 07:58 PM, Ecke wrote: tl;dr
No stories, newfaggot.
Beat me to it.
So, I will now second that idea, with hip internet lingo.
x2
All I ever wanted was to pick apart the day, put the pieces back together my way.
At 9/24/07 07:58 PM, Ecke wrote: tl;dr
No stories, newfaggot.
Hey old'faggot', no NEW STORIES. Note the thread date?
At 6/23/07 06:07 PM, Atarah wrote: "Who's Atarah?"
his gay sex slave
At 10/24/07 08:40 AM, Xmanne wrote: bumpity bumpity BUMP
Call me crazy but isn't this not allowed any more?
This too will pass.
Memento mori
Userpage.
According to our great and powerful overlord- I mean, mods.
To everyone who has posted "No more story threads!"
Stop. This was written before that new rule.
And every next piece of the story WILL BE IN MY USERPAGE!
I will post a link to it once I get done with it [only 15 minutes of comp a day[D in math]].
So it will be out soon. I promise this time.
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