Paralytic Apocalypse

[donglepuss]

An unknown limb lying in the street is not even an object of curiosity. Smashed jaws, teeth, eyes, nails pulled out are nothing but sentences for me, anonymous black and white images .
Barren towns, abandoned children, families executed, hospitals raided , lethal injections given to those belonging to the wrong sect are routine . And routine gets deadly boring .
Rampant drugs , prostitution, pimps and killers from the underworld have resurfaced from the wombs of this city and I watch it all like a horror film. So detached, so close , so far away.
the earth is scorched smoky black and the water has turned into a crimson red.
This desolation leaves me anesthetized . My fingers are paralyzed , my thoughts rigidified at point zero, my feelings frozen . A product of this apocalyptic nihilism. I go through the regular motions only to retreat into my autistic world and stare into the void of destruction.
Yes I am in this mode now .
And during the rare moments when I feel I still belong to something remotely human again, I may catch a tear or two frozen on my cheek. I wipe them quickly away lest the machine that I have become rusts and no longer functions.
And in those moments with my plastified smile fixed to my face like a scar, in those small moments when something alive nudges me and I dare to look at it , I see that :
Hope has become an oxymoron, fear a good companion, anger deep down in a well, and torrents of grief abundant enough to wash the bloody streets

[WahyaRanger2]

Good writing but I feel like the repeated sentences with several metaphors and visualizations can be turned down just a bit.

Also, for future reference, we have a Writing subforum where people are actually looking for work to critic.

Maybe you can build up a story there

[WahyaRanger2]

At 5/19/16 10:28 PM, SocialistClock wrote: isnt a donglepuss that fake mustache glasses thing?

Nah idk those have some special name that escapes me.

Those were the pinnacle of comedy in like the 1910's though. A simpler time.