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What do you think so far? Jan. 17th, 2013 @ 12:01 PM Reply

Hello, NG. This is my first attempt at creative writing for the soul purpose of pleasure. I have a small part done, but I think it's going good. What do you think?
Also, a writing general thread. Post your stories and I'll read them if I have the time.

http://pastebin.com/PZ9Sh0wP

Check it out, please!


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Response to What do you think so far? Jan. 17th, 2013 @ 12:16 PM Reply

At 1/17/13 12:01 PM, potatopower wrote: Hello, NG. This is my first attempt at creative writing for the soul purpose of pleasure. I have a small part done, but I think it's going good. What do you think?
Also, a writing general thread. Post your stories and I'll read them if I have the time.

http://pastebin.com/PZ9Sh0wP

Check it out, please!

Wrong pastebin.
http://pastebin.com/9AYVaARn


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Response to What do you think so far? Jan. 24th, 2013 @ 02:34 AM Reply

Is this just a passage from a random chapter or is this the start of your novel/story? Regardless, the description is nice and fluent, and your use of adjectives isn't congested or overdone. I like the pace of your writing, enough time to become very absorbed with certain atmospheres or items but not too long for it to become boring.

Sorry I can't add much more. I can't really comment on the storyline, but your style of writing is nice.


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