short w.i.p. clip

[Celshaded]

Here's a snippet from an animated series I'm working on. It's based on an old webcomic I used to do:

http://www.newgrounds.com/dump/item/bf67 6cd4e05c4fcf61a5fde3acea6bd0

I started working on paper with this project originally because I thought my drawings looked better, but having to do all that scanning is for the birds so I switched back to using the wacom.

I feel like drawing with the tablet makes my drawings look wonky or something, but yeah let me know what you think.

[bonkanailios]

I feel like everything is just slightly lower quality than it needs to be to hold my attention. Everything is just OK, the animation is good, but not really very exciting. The voiceacting is passable (by no means embarrassing) but I wouldn't stick around for it. The backgrounds (even as plans) are lacking depth or interest, but again aren't like, terrible.

I need something to hook me. Push something further. My suggestion would be the voiceacting. With great voice, you could really have something.

[Celshaded]

well, as for the animation itself I was trying to keep the talking scenes economical because the fight scenes are going to be a little more elaborate and higher quality(more frames, smoother animation). But maybe your right, I might benefit from smoothing out the motion on those talking scenes a little better.

I agree that my scribbly place holder backgrounds don't have much depth. Here are some screen grabs with some finished backgrounds in them:

http://www.newgrounds.com/dump/item/8942 641e4a5ae736e4d7e55fed1eba49
http://www.newgrounds.com/dump/item/df22 884c6f64671c035f0e04a3988feb
http://www.newgrounds.com/dump/item/4872 0ecace176e65ab399eaa8335a9b9

but yeah, thanks for the critique. Any other suggestions would be appreciated.

[bonkanailios]

A forest is one of the most beautiful things in creation.
so take a look at some refs

in fact, before you go any farther just googleimage search forest

Take a look at the greens and oranges and reds. Really look at the colors and let them soak in, even bring them into photoshop or flash and start building a rough pallet from them on the side of your screen. You will be astonished at the colors you end up with.

The sword next to the couch looks a little out of place, and I'm not certain I love the color of the ninja.

These again are by no means bad drawings. They could be much better though if you paid a little more attention to your pallets.

[cmkinusn]

At 2/1/12 01:22 PM, bonkanailios wrote: Awesome reviewing

If there were anyone I would show my works in progress to, it would be you :) You are an excellent reviewer.