At 3/9/13 01:30 AM, JackDGreatest wrote:
This was fun to do.
You should think about working on the composition a bit more before your friend actually gets this tattooed. It isn't bad, but it's something that'll be pretty much permanently attached to him.
I thought I'd make life a bit easier on both of us, so I made you a handy reference for my critique. Sorry about the wall of text.
The first thing that I noticed was the strong directional movement pulling you out of the picture. In The Great Wave (Picture 4), the rhythm of the waves form this exaggerated spiral that pulls your eye all around the composition. You kind of have this happening on the far right side of your picture, but the main thrust of movement shoots you straight off the picture.
You have two focal points vying for dominance. Pretend they're fighting. Whichever one has the highest Emphasis Points (EP) wins.
The first is your sun. Since it's any orangy yellow, it pulls you to it; let's say the sun has a base EP of 30. The sun, however, is really close in value to the rest of the background (picture 3) so it starts to recede into the background, giving it a -5 emphasis debuff. It really isn't an active object either. it's basically two concentric circles, which, in this case doesn't really help or harm it's EP. Overall, the sun's EP is 25.
The other competitor is the wave. It's color doesn't contrast greatly with the sky, so let's say it only starts out with 10 EP. The wave brought two strong buffs with it, though. First, it's both your lightest and darkest values(picture 3), so you immediately pay attention to it. That's a +10 buff right there. Second, the tips of the wave are super active, giving the wave another 10 EP. The wave has a commanding 35 EP.
So the wave's 30 EP beats out the sun, but not by much. Though, that also means the the primary focus of the picture is also what pulls you out of it.
Look at The Great Wave again. The tallest wave is the picture's focal point. it's the area of highest contrast, both in terms of value and color. That part of the picture is also the most active.
Sorry if any of this isn't clear, and good luck on whatever else you're working on.