Good start

But like people've been saying. The beep is kinda annoying. Yet all of a sudden at the end you use a synth that actually sounded nice and light/trancey. Where was it during the rest of the song? :D

Also, the standard kick/hat/clap formula mentioned below also tends to be a bit less grating on the ears. :) Save the weird clap placements for bars 7-8 when you're doing your hook.

Where do I begin.

I'm afraid nearly everyone who's had fruityloops has made a song similar to this. dnc_kick, dnc_hat, dnc_clap... we've all used them before. So that gives you a low originality rating.

Now, don't get me wrong, this isn't AS terrible as some of the things I've heard, but you still have a very long way to go before you make something danceable ;).

Your beat was constructed in a fashion that confused me. The synth was also kinda grating on the ears, i think you turned the volume of the synths up way too high.

It's a pretty good start though. I better turn off my comp, it's lightning outside.

well

u seem to be average, this is how most people start, usin kick hat and clap, that same 140 tempo, callin some trance kinda stuff techno, practice makes perfect, and ur off to a normal start

It hurts my ears...

ok... I gave you points for origionality. try to cut up your own samples... also you have the main beat all wrong. its supposed to go (Kick) (hat) (Kick+clap) (hat) (Kick) (hat) (Kick+clap) (hat)

Also take out that annoying siren in the background... you definately used Fruityloops for this. Try to mess around with more than just a few samples in fruity loops. if you aren't using fruity loops then get it and mess around with samples and effects like I do.