Improvement

Metal isn't about an electric guitar, if you really want to metalize a masterpiece like this I really suggest speeding it up a little bit and adding a little piece of yourself into it. Something unique that makes it stand out, none of which do you have. Keep trying, it isn't a bad song but its nothing special.

The middle is alright, but the start is bad.

It isn't exactly what I'd call metal, but it's okay enough to sit through. MAybe you should get an actual guitar player so this doesn't sound like some robot with a synth.

Nothing to shout about

Its alright nothing to shout about. It could of been bette. I wouldnt even call this metal at all.

yawn

Yawn i agree with hurter is just boring an i even can't give it a 5

half and half

Half for the idea, and emptyness for calling synthed guitars, "metal'. For SHAME.