Well...

there´s a lot of rhythm, but no melody. The song changes beat and adds more beats as it goes on, but it won´t feel like it progresses unless you add an instrument to play an melody, or at least to sett a tune.

Try adding a bassline to your beat and play around with melodies instead of changing the beats so rapidly. Good luck!

Experimental

Hmm, DnB. Well, you have some good beats there but... i'm not feeling it. You have to add much more to this.

There is a huge emptyness in this song and I reccommend that you fill it. If you do a DnB song with nothing but DnB you have to make sure those gaps are filled with strong, loud, fast, melodies or beats. DnB shouldn't be some tribal bullshit; it should be crazy DnB!

If you don't wanna fill in the gaps that way I recommend putting in some synths or something just as chord;beat keeprers. Good luck; and good job for your first DnB!