Lack of proper motif, according to your description it's about trying to escape while trying to remain clean.

This does not resemble something that is trying to give an eloquent type feel.

Music is half technicality and half experience.

While this song isn't exactly breaking anything or creating any sort of harmful dissonance,
It isn't living to what you were talking about in the link.

It isn't a bad song, but it lacks identity.

well well, I feel like the drums and melodic instruments don't work together.. I mean you got this spooky ambience and like total straight dance beat to it.. just doesn't sound good to me, also the drum samples themselves are of those clean-electro type, I would use something more natural, orchestra-ish, juggle with the rhytm a bit and maybe create some weird beat to contribute the song's overall atmosphere

mixing, in short, is bad.. in "drop" sections everything is competing with other, also the kick is really drowned.. you can watch some mixing tutorials on YT, and also practice a lot

If this is you 2nd song, it isn't THAT bad, but of course you got a long way ahead of you

good luck