Here we go! I notice a bit more variation in this version than the previous one.

The song is mostly comprised of the main organ-y synth at the beginning, which is rearranged and modified throughout the song with varying intensities and backing synths.

The note placement and instrument choices all seem good, although it just seems as if though the song lacks a section of great intensity. If somewhere near the middle of the track there was another synth that temporarily played a satisfying solo on top of the other instruments and was accompanied by faster and heavier drums, then this song would have good 'normal', medium and heavy parts.

A bit of tweaking and this song turn into something really cool.
Keep at it! :P

Sorry if I don't have the greatest terminology,