I think you should progress music faster . 50 seconds with same pattern is too long .
Piano was too much in background and didn't harmonize well . Perhaps lounder electric analog would be better .
Overall it needs more variations .
Acuity means a lot of things; you decide what this track conveys.
Some fast-paced thumping with a perhaps somewhat sorrowful mood.
I think you should progress music faster . 50 seconds with same pattern is too long .
Piano was too much in background and didn't harmonize well . Perhaps lounder electric analog would be better .
Overall it needs more variations .
All fair observations, particularly about the piano which I didn't want to have punch through too much of; nor become lost in; everything else, so I tried for a middle ground.
Faster progression, I somewhat agree: I recall being advised that one should get to the good bit within 30 to 60 seconds, but perhaps sooner rather than later is the better option?
As for more variations, I would say that I wanted to keep things fairly simple and consistent, although maybe I took the risk of being closer to the boundary of boring this time.
Whether or not the aspects you mentioned are a matter of taste, it's good to read what someone else thinks, as it keeps me on my toes a bit. Thank you :)
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