I like the drum set. But it could have a bit more excitement in it. The melody is fine but the harmony sort of throws it off immediately into like honky tonk.
Then the end has me confused. Maybe you ought to try a DnB track wit dis.
Make it so you want to "F"N Scream already!" AGH THIS IS A BORE! And I think I heard you SNORE!"
Dunno thought I'd throw it out there.