Hi there. I think this track is coherently constructed, and basically pleasant, however, to me, there isn't really anything that emotionally connects to me. Presumably from the tags, it's meant to be 'sad', but there's no real suggestion of melancholia in the track, nor are there any real melodic ideas that grab you, resulting in a bit of a stale, lifeless atmosphere. It just needs a bit more punch. Hopefully you can work towards making it better. Good luck.