You had 3 different things going, all in different keys mind you. The singing was in one key, the ping you had happening was in in another, your bass was in another key. they clashed way too often and harmonized way too little. Basic music theory and understanding of modes could help with that.

At parts i enjoyed it immensely such as 5:00, Your transitions are smooth and well placed. I will in the future i will be sure to take note of such and attempt to replicate them.