I hadn't put massive amounts of work into the melody. It was mostly a quick, expressive song. A lot of my work is done by what others ask of me. This one was done off of what I wanted to do, and as I had said in the description, it was very late. Thanks for the review, and I will be trying to improve when I have the time and when things get fixed.
Edit: You know, I go back and listen to my songs at times, and I wonder what I was thinking when I make pieces of crap such as this one...
I'm sure there are some people out there who would like this though, and that's what I aim for. I'm not here to make music everyone likes, too many people do that. I'm here to make music for those people who don't like everything else.