[JohnnyCrysis] VeVe's Song

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[JohnnyCrysis] VeVe's Song

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Sample: http://www.newgrounds.com /audio/listen/289924

Utie Vania(VeVe) is a friend of mine from Indonesia(I have a lot of friends from Indonesia, actually). She listens to all of my music, so I decided it was time to make a song especially for her. She likes reggae and jazz music, and I'm a fan of both as well, so I decided to use reggae samples. Added some slight crackling to it to give it something of a vinyl feel, as well as a random gunshot at the end for no reason. I used a lot of delay on the guitar. The drums are from a VST that I use. It generates loops, and I simply exported a loop, then sliced it into individual drums and re-arranged. I think that's all, so review, vote, download, whatever. Enjoy!

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Sawdust

2011-06-06 13:09:57

Where do I start...

First and foremost, please stop relying so hard on samples. You're not Daft Punk, and you're just making the songs worse by adding random effects and lazily put together drum beats. I'm really sorry dude, but this is just grating.

For starters, you didn't actually do anything with the sample except chop it up and add delay. That's just too cheap, man. The result is something so insultingly simple and banal that if I was the original artist I'd be disappointed with what someone did with my piece.

And please, for the love of god, do more things with your samples. Chopping up a sample and adding a drum beat that isn't even properly synced does not constitute a proper release. This needs a bassline and way more melodies. At least try to make the piece interesting next time.

Sorry dude, but this song is just devoid of any melodic or rhythmic interest. Please find a way to use your own musical ideas when arranging pieces together next time, they will sound much, much better.

JackRocker responds:

Sampling is a large part of Old School. I do need to try doing some more original works, but currently I lack the setup to do it properly. Check out my Punk submissions and you'll see what I mean. Also, I'm not sure why you say "lazily put together drum beats." They're not the best, I admit. I'm still improving, like I keep telling people. But I did do my best on them. Maybe I'm just taking this comment the wrong way.

You are right on this. I still need to practice with sample editing. I'm getting better, although this submission doesn't really reflect that at all. However, the song I sampled from was apparently made out of Mixcraft loops, so if the "artist" is too disappointed, he/she has no real reason to be.

Again, I agree. Especially on the part of the bassline. I'm still practicing with making my own basslines. Most of the time the bass is just part of the sample I used(assuming that sample has bass). I'm still practicing with using VSTs, etc. to do it.

No need to apologize. You're right on nearly ever point here. I appreciate you taking the time to review this track. Honestly, if I'd have heard something that I didn't like that well, I'd probably pass it up completely. So thanks for the feedback, anything helps me to improve.

Thanks again!

Buoy

2011-06-05 16:54:43

Enter your summary, rating, and review for: [Johnn

Yeah I checked the original and while the original may be just a collection of mixcraft loops, that doesn't really matter when you edited and chopped up the loops and all that- the only thing with mixcraft loops and that kind of thing is that we don't want a load of songs on the audio portal that are nothing but sequences of unedited premade loops. It's not a legal problem or anything.

I can't say I like the song though. It's ridiculously repetitive- I can skip to any point in the song and I'll hear that organ thing and the drums. Sure there are variations in melody and patterns and all that, but it's just tiring to listen to after a while. And it's lacking in the sound department- some reverb would be great on all the instruments, and also as others pointed out it needs a bass, almost any kind of bass would do in this song I imagine.

JackRocker responds:

Alright, thanks a lot.

Repetition does seem to be a real problem in my music. Something for me to work on, I guess. Bass... *sigh* ...that's something that's going to take me a while to get down. I agree with everyone on that though. I really need to practice it. I appreciate you taking the time to review this. Any feedback I get helps me improve. Thanks again!

JStanio

2011-06-04 21:43:19

Someone get my Fedora!

You can't listen to jazz/reggae without a fedora.

As DJDureagon said, definitely needs a bass line, but the feel is great. Has real potential to be an awesome song. =)

JackRocker responds:

You're right on all points. Thanks for the review!

DJDureagon

2011-06-02 11:34:05

Needs a bassline

Other than that. I like the sounds and feel. Im not sure about the gunshot though. Feels kinda ... abrupt lol. A good foundation for osmething greater.

JackRocker responds:

Definitely needs a bassline. I'm really....well..I suck at sampling bass. I may have to just dig out my friend/roommate's bass guitar and start using that. About the gunshot...Yeah. Don't ask what I was thinking. Just thought it was kinda funny. Thanks a lot for the review!

dotty3124

2011-06-02 00:47:32

hey

thought id check this out . whats with the cracklilng sound?

JackRocker responds:

Tried to give it something of a vinyl feel, like an old record. Thanks for the review!