Aaah

This is much better man!
A generous nine, you just need a better mic indeed...good flow and yea u need more rhymes in your songs bro.

Otherwise its good! :) 5/5, 9/10

Awesome!

This is the first song from you I've heard and I'm already in love is there any instrumental version of this song at all, because I'd love to download both this and the instrumental onto my computer

Flow is good

Decent flow, and a good beat. Problem is, look at your lyrics dude. Most of the time you aren't even rhyming.

Keep at it