less then more

This might actually work after some time..

first, its a good intro.
you introduce every instrument splended [mixing = 9]
the drums you have chosen are of the
right choice, i dont really mind how long tracks are but i think you might wanna shorten the length of this intro peace?
like a maximum around 2 to 2:30 minutes
if you can do this, you might wanna go further with the false melody to introduce your breakdown with a PAD that slowly comes in.

well i cant really think of anything so far, i hope this helps, if not you can always hit me up.

Cheers

Needs improvement

You take way too long to get to the point, and when the melody comes in it doesn't quite work. The dissonances are interesting, though, so there's definitely potential here.

Review

Hey man thanks for checking my tune, I'm totally not familiar with the whole techno scene so i'm gonna give you a producer's point of view :)

+ The drums sounded very tidy, nice & crispy
+ your melody you use in your main part sure is nice, enjoyed it

- Your bass has some sort of harsh rumble, which is a shame because the actual bass sound is nice
- the sound of your main melody seems off from time to time, i know it might be the intention, but it doesn't always sound that great ;)

There you got some + and - , hope I was of some use. Overall it's not my style, but it's well produced and therefor I give you a 5/5 :)