Meh...
Really sorry man, but this didn't really impress me much. I'm probably going to give you a pretty harsh review, but I hope you can use it to improve your next works. This song isn't really too good, it's basically the same as any other generic hardstyle track except with a piano and some weird FX. I don't really like this one much, sorry :(.
The melodies, unfortunately, aren't that good. Usually when I hear the same melody loads and loads of times (before I started reviewing I left this song on loop for like half an hour or so) it ends up sticking in my head, but these ones just didn't. The piano was alright, but the notes at 0:10 actually sound a little off-key or just wrong, IMO. Then, when I thought the song was about to turn into a new direction at 0:28, it ended up changing for the worst when the generic annoying hardstyle saw synth came in and the song became a cluttered mess with random weird FX, a kick drum, piano and saw synth playing altogether. The song doesn't really live up to its name either, since all the instruments except for the piano, are way too rough. Sorry man, but the melodies, to be honest, aren't really that impressive.
That goes for the instruments you used too. The piano really wasn't such good quality, and the saw wave was extremely generic and bland. This also lacks effects. I think the piano could really do with some reverb to it, maybe some delay too, and even the saw synth could do with some faint reverb. As for sound effects, that 'balloon deflating' sound effect was really overused, and doesn't sound too good either. I'd suggest completely removing it from the song, or at least not using it so much. On the other hand, the sweeps were used well and I liked the fact that you added some vocal samples too. So while you have some good sweeps and vocal samples, if I were you I would seriously consider completely changing the instruments and doing something about that deflating balloon.
The transitions were alright, and I especially liked the ones with the well-timed vocals, but a problem I have with this song is that it never reaches a climax. For example, at 0:56, when there's a vocal sample saying 'another level', it doesn't really go to another level, but stays at the same level: a kick and saw wave. Actually, the song is full of anti-climaxes, such as 1:39 as well. The transitions are good, but unfortunately the fact that some transitions lead to an anti-climax when I expect the song to become more powerful really doesn't work too well.
The structure and variety, unfortunately, really need work. Basically you only had two simple melodies topped up by a kick per beat except occasionally some parts where the kick plays every half beat, 2 vocal samples and some random FX. I think this could really do with more alternate melodies since only 2 melodies to last for almost 2 and a half minutes isn't such a good idea. The intro and outro were pretty much average. Intro was a little plain, but still not so bad and the outro, although abrupt, was alright too.
To be honest I really wasn't impressed by those drums. You only had a kick drum to support the song, and it was really badly varied too. No crash cymbals, no snares, nothing... just a ridiculously bassey hardstyle kick which gets rough on the ears after hearing this song loop at least 5 times. Sure, hardstyle focuses a lot on kicks but more percussion would really help out over here.
Overall, this isn't such a good song. While it has some good sweeps, vocal samples, the transitions were alright and the intro/outro were OK, the instruments were bland, the melodies weren't too good, the drums were simple and repetitive, the song itself was badly varied and the fact that this is really generic and there are so many parts which sound anti-climatic really ruin this song. Don't give up though, with some practice I think you could turn out to be a great artist. Sorry for the long, harsh review, I figured you'd prefer if I was harsh and honest rather than dishonest. Good luck on your future songs...
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