Starts off well

Then it sounds like you've gone tone deaf. Sounds like a video game song, and then it sounds like a video game where you're about to die. Make sure you do your song in the same key. Other than it hurting my ears in that way, good job. Could use some build up and stuff like that. I'm going to assume you're using FL Studio, if you need pointers, I'm no expert but I could help. Better luck next time.

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