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Zeviron - Guilded City

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Okay, well... this is my first real submission of 2010 which is cool :D
i've been working on this breaktrance piece for around 2 weeks now.
Just needs a little tweeking but i though i'd put it up anyway...
well thanks for listening and any pointers and criticism is welcome.
thanks again :D

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Awesome, but needs variety...

I really liked this submission, although it does have its defects. Still, it's really fun to listen to, and has such a fast and action-packed rhythm that you can't NOT enjoy listening to this. Good job! Lol, sounds like a song from ParagonX9 :P.

The melodies are what impressed me most in this submission. They were so catchy and fast-paced, and I really enjoyed listening to them. Unfortunately, I'm not much of a fan of all of the sidechaining you did in this song. The song sounds pretty cluttered and it occasionally gets a bit hard to listen to the melody properly when the drums are always in the way and making the melodies bounce from soft to loud and loud to soft all the time. Also, in my opinion, this badly needs alternate melodies. Although the melody you have is brilliant, it still gets repetitive like any other melody. Add a few more melodies, since around one melody with a few changes isn't enough to last for almost 3 and a half minutes, even though the melody is catchy and well-made. I mean, if you can make such a good main melody, I'd love to hear what you can do with alternate melodies too.

The synths are excellent, IMO. They had that 'Video-Game'-ish sound to them, which I really liked, and I'm sure this'll fare really well in some vertical shooter. The main synth was very cool, and I also liked the square synth you added, pl8us the synth at around 1:50-ish was awesome. Maybe you could add some more pads, specifically bass pads, since at times I think this song slightly lacks depth, although it could just be me. Other than that small nitpick, I think the synths are very good and the synth choice was amazing. The sound effect at 2:34 was also really, really cool, and added a lot to that transition. When it comes to the synths and effects, I don't really have much to complain about, although perhaps you could add some more effects, such as sweeps, and a well-timed vocal sample saying something catchy in a robotic voice might be cool. Still, good job with the instruments/effects ^^.

The transitions on the whole are excellent, althought at times some reverse cymbals or sweeps would help out in some transitions to stop them from possibly being abrupt or too sudden. The only transition I'm not too sure about would be the one at 1:49, when that crash sort of comes out of nowhere with an abrupt transition. Maybe, although I'm not too sure about this, if you add a little tempo change when the song goes slower for a like 2 seconds and then speeds up, just before that transition at 1:49, the crash cymbal might be a bit more 'expected' if you get what I mean. New instruments were introduced pretty well, but what impressed me quite a lot were the buildups. I LOVED the buildup at the beginning, and the buildup at 1:49 onwards was extremely well executed.

The structure is very good, and I can't complain about it, but as I said above, one melody with a few changes is definitely not enough variety, so more variety would be great. I really liked the break at 1:50, maybe you could add some more breaks, or maybe some key changes and ambient parts when the song goes slower and calmer. Things like these help with the variety. Intro was great, and the buildup made it even better, but as for the ending, it was quite abrupt and sudden. You had a good idea, but the fact that it's abrupt ruins it a little, and it also could do with an ending note. Maybe you could add a ritardando at the end, and then a final note along with the crash...

The drums were decent, except that they sidechained everything so much, which was annoying. Samples were pretty good, if not slightly generic, and although the beat was simple, it did the job well ^^. The drums were a bit weak for this song, though, maybe you should make them more powerful and aggressive. Still, not bad percussion work :).

Overall, it's a great song, with a cool melody, but variety is the main problem here. I believe that if you vary your songs more, you'll be one of the best artists on NG, so work on that a little. Keep it up, though!
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Nice

I think you could've varied up the melody a little more. Added some more parts or something. Other than that, I like it.

Great

I trully enjoyed that track. Flows really well. I love the break at 1:50.
Keep it up and don't stop hehe !
5/5 10/10

breaktrance

pretty sick stuff. i hate how everyone uses that one splashy dance snare all the time. besides that, i actually like this a lot. lots of variation and a decent build-up.

,;:,;:

Very... Paragonx9 style.

Anyway that's cool. It's a good way to do like them sometime.

Nice part over 1:50!

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Score
4.58 / 5.00

Uploaded
Feb 14, 2010
6:47 AM EST
Genre
Drum N Bass
File Info
Song
8 MB
3 min 30 sec

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