lol...

Its alright I guess... I lol'd at your first vocal though xDDDDDDDDDD

alright,

ok, so here's what i think

maybe you can use more layers (a couple of recordings saying the same thing but in a different keys, or the same depending on the effect your looking for) at different parts of the song, especially when you hold out words and notes

sometimes your notes in your voice are a little off, but that takes practice, so you don't have to rush that

other than that, its a good song, you should try and use a p-popper, it helps reduce the static sound, and its got good lyrics

keep singing man, sing your heart out, and i hope to see more soon

:)