Nice.

The person below me probably doesnt understand that not all people are the same. Some people get better by being critiqued and having people tell them what they could do to get better and what to add. You did a good job on this song.

i disagree

You get better by experimenting and learning as much as you can about the way you're writing music. Get some tutorials, study some musicology, listen to the way other people do it and try to emulate what you like, these are methods to improving your skill. Reviews on newgrounds are mostly worthless. If you're using fl studio, try www.warbeats.com and for musicology I'd reccomend hitting up wikipedia and looking up chord progressions...for a start anyway.