Interesting.
The bass line in the beginning was very nice, but when the guitar comes in.....it becomes pretty bad. I can tell you use Fruity Loops, and that you are fairly new to it. Steer clear of the Slayer Plugin, it is not very good. The ending riff is very cool as well. Although i would doubt that it is originally your's, due to your history of stealing other people's loops. (The trance of the beat) Keep working at it man. Try not to repeat so much.