hmm nice
3.60 / 5.00 (+ 0.20) I'm only commenting on ur part 2 the track, it's a nice idea altho you gotta work on the delivery a little, it sounds a lil weird, anyways good job
Keep it pimpin'
BN out
I added another verse to gasmasq's track. Beat is by Anno Domini. You can find him on Soundclick
EDIT: dubs gone.
Lyrics:
I sit in a time drenched in wine and flammable gasses
you might find that i'm entrenched in the worst you can imagine
what happens when the yacht turns into the boondocks
and two locks are on every door, where would you stop?
am I on top? hardly, but pardon the party i live in
i just happen to be laughin to cover up where i've been sinnin
if grinnin is the only way to forgo another tear
then toss me another vicodin and crack another beer
if i become a constelation, hesitate not to cheer me
but if i'm not on the stage, the please don't come near me
seeing clearly is not my intention at the moment
intoxication takes the fear away from laying dead and broken
what i'm holding onto may not be what's best at the time
but if i'm distracted then i'm not chasing demons in my mind
so when you find me on the floor praising the porcelain angel
pay no mind, just give me more to view this life at my angle
if i lay awake at night then i remember my flaws
if i drink myself to death, then tomorrow i'm gone
is it really so wrong to contemplate the inevitable?
to take my chances instead of waiting for another window
the behavior i'm certain of, i need to conduct
i will take your perfect love and eat it all up
as my patience exits, i lay in wait for the fight
if reincarnations exists, then i'll kill myself tonight
it might make your life that much harder to bear
but in a coma, in the hospital, i won't have a care
i wear emotions in my actions and they're right on my sleeve,
but if i cause you pain then i ask you forgive me.
if life in a better tomorrow, causes sorrow today
then i'll ask to borrow time, to get carried away
because there's nary a day in which i find i succeed
it's just too scary to play, so i'd rather not breathe
With every moment passing I spin out of control
Watch my grasp fade gasping, as I watch this unfold
When I step up to the mic, a monster rises within
It's practically a given, Mike dies and Wyze is living
I'm sinning, with every step of my life
Am I setting the right path while the challenges are rife?
The site of my struggle, makes my enemies elope
As I'm forced to juggle, faith, enmity and hope
It's so, depressing, as I see my world compressing
I think I'm besting, my skills, but I'm really just in testing
They're assessing, how well I can adapt
But the fact's that my whole soul's in this rap
It's my last attempt, to connect with what's real
I don't feel, my emotions are an open and shut deal
And such speel, will shut my luck by tomorrow
So hand me the vodka, to drink the fuck out my sorrow
hmm nice
3.60 / 5.00 (+ 0.20) I'm only commenting on ur part 2 the track, it's a nice idea altho you gotta work on the delivery a little, it sounds a lil weird, anyways good job
Keep it pimpin'
BN out
alright, I'll see what I can do about that. Thanks for the review
crazy
One of the best tracks i heard on NG, this is just crazy,lyrics are deep beat is real deep, i would have liked to hear another verse from you tho Wyze. 10/10 5/5 downloaded
P.S no big deal really but the "and i'd rather not breathe" is actually "so i'd rather not breathe" in the lyrics
Ya, there are a couple of spots where the lyrics are slightly off, I'll fix that
Nice nice.
The music in general keeps my attention i love listening to it. The rapping is pretty nice. The rythem is pretty nice and everything does work for what it is. All in all I'm about all reviewed out lol did a small spree just now so i'm tired.. Keep it up fella's both of ya'll!
Wyldfyre1
Well gramps, take a caffeine pill! Lol jk Wyld. I've got made love for you... no homo... or maybe homo? I DON'T EVEN KNOW ANYMORE!!!
Alright
Your overdubs are off in quite a few places. I think this track would sound much better and more meaningful without them, kinda make the listener tune in more, y'know?
I like your verse though. Very meaningful. My fav line was that "Wyze survives, Mike dies".
Good work for it being so quick.
hmm. I've got it without overdubs, so I'll change it to that now
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.