Cool song but...

Sounds a bit "The Libertine's"ish which, if thats what your going for, you've done pretty well.
Improvements
- Add drums. I realise thats not a very useful piece of advice lol but i think me and you both know they would work well here regardless of what other reviewers have said.
- If you don't want to add drums, take any distortion or overdrive off of that guitar and turn the volume down. Even if you do add drums, still the guitar volume down.
- Like the vocals but add some reverb, to them and mess around with them a bit. Stand a bit further from the microphone.
- If you add drums, make sure you add a good catchy bassline.

I've done and do some pretty similar stuff to this kind of music and i do kind of know what im talking about, im not just an a-hole. Its a really good song though mate, its just you asked for ideas to improve and i listed a few.

wow

great, just great, very good evrything....cept vocals, w/ a little better vocals this could be featured

Very nice Guitar!

But you should only submit the guitar tracks alone for placements, and master the vocals later on down the road with better recording. Nice lyrics, but bad recorded vocals! I just love your Guitar work!!!! you should repost just your Guitar track, and watch the comments on it! Youl be amazed, because I know its good stuff!!! Good job fellow Musician!!!!!

sunday over easy

I think this sounds really pretty, it has a really nice tune to it. I don't think you should add drums, I think it's just right with the guitar/vocals.

As far as improvement goes -- the vocals are a little bit inconsistent in the volume and harmonizing department. Also, I'm not sure how I feel about the usage of the word "infantile," but it's really the only word that works and make sense/rhymes.

You have a nice voice, keep it up!

Hmm...

Reminds me a lot of a spanish rock song called "Mi Primer Dia Sin Ti"
Meh, I like it...