????a piece of a song????

this is annoyingly only a piece of a song. i dont mind reviewing it, but TBH its not easy listening. iif we all submitted small single riffs to newgrounds it would be packed with this kind of thing. and how would we find the ones that should get noticed?
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Okay. the lowest key playing in this Eb is out of key with the melody. take the melody which is based solely on the white notes and move them up 6 semitones. or alternatively take the Eb down to an A. making the song play in a minor. The beat is ok. although the snare is clacky and aggresive. it is repetitive. and very annoying altogether. i think you should embrace one idea and develope it further at a resonable pace. nice and slow... easy going and build on it. keep experimenting all the time and it will get better.

Do not be offended or surprised by my response. simply look at the vote score, and thank me for having the jip out of the other voters to vote 0 and tell you why.
Keep working. I am sorry. i am not a harsh reviewer. but i can not compliment anything in this work yet. Keep! iT! UP! the more you practice the better you will get. If you have no idea about semitones or chords or musical terms, just ask me personally via PM. or anyone else in the forums. I am happy to teach what i know.
i mean no disrespect.
everyone starts somewhere! and your at the beggining.
so take a step forward.

Thanks for reading.
Stalagmite.