Score: 10
"here is the story i think can go"
date: August 4, 2009
behind this piece, plus suggestions. it will go 0:00-0:00 story;suggestions.
0:00-0:28 the main character gets back up from defeat, as the music gets heroic, in their time of despair; an addition could be a dispair like theme to build into the begining
0:29-0:41 the hero starts the "epic speach" that you hear in anime when they get epic. his hair and loose clothing start to rise at 0:39;nothing, it's all good.
0:42-0:54 the speach continues, with a slight aura circleing at his feet, pulsing larger and larger, with the DBZ "hair flaping in the wind", the pulsing stops at 0:51 and the aura startsexpanding, loking like its going to blow at
0:52 ; could be a liitle longer with a little more buildup, but it's all good.
0:55-1:20 the finishing of the speech and full blown aura encircling and intertwining our "hero", with the rest of the fighting stopped and everyone paying attention to him; it's great, though could be more heroic.
1:21-1:30 the aura grows, he lifts his head and opens his eyes, to them now being gold with the Dragon slit (|, a downward one.) and at the end lifts arms in a cross above his head; nothing
1:31-1:32 throws arms down, aura bursting out and instantly disipating, going into a crouched start dash like position, dashing forwards to the guy who PwNed him at the crash; could be a second or 2 longer
1:33-1:44 duck-dodges an attack and starts to pulverise the shit out of him, uppercutting the enemy at the start of the build-up; nothing to date
1:44-1:45 is anime slowmo, of the hero leaping to reach him, smashing him to the ground a half second before the crash, with little miss enemy hitting the ground causing an anime ground hitting explosion at the crash: perfectly timed
1:46 hero crashes down, hitting the enemy and pulverising him
1:47-1:55 no sign of anyone, only smoke.
1:56-2:04 a shadowed figure appears in the smoke, walking towards everyone else, the enemies leave, and everyone else holds their breath.
2:05-2:13 that sick figure shadow gets darker and gains a distinct outline of someone; impresevely done
2:14-end the figur breaks through the smoke, it's the battered hero, everyone is happy and amazed, and the leader of the team sits there while the rest go to help their "savior" and thinks, ' all this time we've been serching for the weilder of "that" power, when he's been under our noses the whole time, and to think he summond that much power with no prior use or knowledge, his potential is Frightening' ; i saved this for the end, though i think the title of this piece can be Discovery. and PM me if you want to here more of the plotline behind this story.
August 4, 2009
Author's Response:
Lmao. Dude, thank you very much for the awsome story. I've never had someone do this before, and its so epic. Much appreciated! I'm glad you enjoyed the song.
