Well...

It COULD be an excelent experimental track. But for one, the talking is just horrible. In some parts, it almsot fits, like around 1:40. And the kick is horrible, to, it needs to have a CRAPLOAD more bass behind it. Althgouh, I actually liked the melodies you used in the song. But it's the sound of the VOICE!!!! If you want the voice to fit more, you need to have ALOT more going on in the song. Like, a ton of melody, so it in a sense overpowers the voice, but not enough that you can no longer hear it. Also, distorting the voice might add a cool effect. So, all in all, I would say add more melody and change the sound of the voice. But still, good job on the melodies that are there.