New?

I mean, this isn't amazing, but it's not half bad! Especially if you didn't use loops! I'm gonna have to agree with ClearRed, though, the cutoff in the middle was really dumb. Just mix up some of the stuff, and use non-loops (if you did, sorry!) to put your own twist on it. I think you've got talent, man. Just keep trying! PM me if you improve it!

Not bad

but not quite good either.
That break down, or cut off, or whatever it was, was absolutely atrocious.
other wise the rest of the song was decent, good at best.
Keep it up there, much much better then most newbies, and even some more experienced people