def make it longer

this totally needs to be longer it has great potential

dude...

u gotta finish this, cause i bet it could be on the top 30. PM me when its done

Nice intro!

The opening gated synth was nice and there was a nice wee hat loop that sounded good aswell (it could be turned down a touch though).

I've heard far worse things that have been rated better

keep it up an turn it into a whole song!

Hm. not bad.

This is pretty good for a demo im assuming, it could use some work, you said the ending lead you have now isnt what you were planning on using, you might want to keep and just build upon it. I liked it. Overall: 8/10 4/5