it's not bad for your frist

not bad. could tell right off the bat it's was an fls mix right? you get the hang of it the more you use it. try to add little reverb to it to give it some ambeince and you should also look into the arps on the sytrus and the boihazard plusins cuz they can realy make your sound pump out and would help you a lot if you don't know too many scales or don't have a keyboard contraler to play them out.