Ouch my ears

It's... painful. Police could use this for spike strip. The whole song is just blam, and there's no real rhythm. You did good on the end, but other than that, this song needs everything an audible song requires.

Please don't make a song about leeches being shot at someone via machene gun. Please.

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I think that person was too kind to you, this is offensive to mine ears.
It's too busy mah friend, it's like the musical representation of leeches screaming and being shot at you from a machine gun (which is cool but not musically pleasing).
At least it is devoid of meows. Maybe try to make a soft piece later? It's harder than making a loud piece, I want to see you try.

Hm...

Volume...

Notes...

Transition...

All went out the window with this.

I can understand though what you are trying to do.

What would help is first, make sure everything isn't loud, like this.

And try and see if the sounds blend..smoothly.

The sounds on this blend, but it's everything but smooth.

The ending was good though, and the piano.

Don't worry, you'll get better. Takes practice, I should know XD.

^.~