not bad

coo coo man

enh

as a dude who listens to all types of music, techno aint ur style man, stick with them sick lyrics u got with rappin, not bad for a first try tho

you did ok

since you rap and tried to mix techno and hip hop you did fairly well.
the end was sweet but the song hits you quick.

Man...

Good first try, but you're thinkin' too much in terms of Hip-Hop, as Druid said. House would progress slower than this...whereas in Hip-hop you have a 4 or 8 bar lead-in straight to the meat of the track (mid, high and low plus drums), most techno is slow progression. 4 bars of beat alone, 4 bars of beat plus high synth, then 4 more of beat, high synth, bass, and so on and so on, with massive breaks at points. What you've got here is almost dub/glitch without any dubs or glitches...it's frantic, it comes at you from all angles, and it thrashes ya hard. Not a bad sound, per se, just a bit experimental for most tastes methinks.

But by all means, keep at it. My first techno jam sounded way worse than this years ago, and I was doin' industrial ambient/horrorcore, which already has a tendency to sound like garbage even when it's done correctly...

Keep it pimpin', lookin' forward to hear your sound progress in this.

Peace

i sware i Reviewed this

you got the same problem i do, you Try to had hip-hop to it

but man its not bad, lol i try to add techno to my hip hop