This tune has grown on me.
But I think this one requires a major makeover in the mixing department. The melody is so hard to hear, the bass is way too loud and the accompaniment only makes things harder to hear. The tune is great, but it's unfortunate that it can't be heard clearly. Other than that, it's a great piece. I said it on your other pieces, but this one needs mixing most, and I know you're only using the FL demo, so you won't be able to edit it, so I'll just say that it's your biggest issue now, and keep that in mind for your future songs.
I'll give this one a 4/5, if the mixing was better, I'd give it a 5.