This is pretty decent

This would make a really great song, you just need help with mastering, that's all.

And just to let you know, listen to some dance stuff to know what it sounds like. You could head over to http://www.digitallyimported.com to get an idea. (Please don't ban me!)

What you need is a lead bass, some kicks, and few hats. Go ahead and AIM Comet if you like but what you should really do is show this to someone like czer323 for mastering. HE can helkp you out with that. He helped me and I came a long ways... Don't submit much to NG anymore though. People vote low on my songs just cuz they don't like the style of music. To tell you the truth, if you don't liek that type of music, don't listen to it you bastards!

But anyways, all in all, I think this is decent. Just talk to my friend Czer323 and tell him I sent you and show him this or what ever you like and he'll teach you a few things.

More Dance but good

It's a great beat, can you AIM me (I'm TheCometCE on AIM) and I'll add in some FX, that'll make this song sound pretty good. You've got alot of talent, you're better at making up melodies and leads than I am lol.
If you want to have a really cool sounding arp track, try using the Simsynth called TB303ish, it's the best sounding synth in there (It's the one I usually start a song with).
Nice work, you've got potential!
-TC, the self dubbed and overlyegotisticly named "OverLord of the Audio Portal"...so? Just alot of music!
PS:My AIM is TheCometCE, msg me!

Not bad for a first shot

Very catchy theme running throughout. This is definitely something I can have going in the background for studying.

It seems a little light though, but most of the stuff I listen to has a steady drum loop with a lot going on.